The Willows: Haven, by Hope Collier, Kindle Edition
Summary:
It’s not until Ashton’s father dies that she learns the truth about her family: her mother, her father, herself. And it doesn’t stop there. Her whole life has been a lie, and as time goes on, Ashton is learning more and more that there’s no one she can trust. She’s exposed to a magical world that she never knew existed and yet possibly cannot exist without her. Ultimately, Ash has to decide if her life is worth fighting for, and choose whether to follow the path laid out for her, as others have done before, or carve her own path, as her mother once did. If Ash runs, she’ll be running forever.
Overall Impressions:
At its heart, this a good story with a highly original concept. Hope Collier brings a fresh voice to the Fantasy market, and this novel has a wide appeal, appropriate for the Young Adult audience while still appealing to adults. One of the things that I think make this novel a potential hit, aside from what I’ve already mentioned, is that it carries that all-important core value readers are looking for: entertainment. This book provided some good reading material for me when I needed to pass the time.
That said, it’s not without it’s flaws. I’d love to read a second edition of this novel if it ever came out, just because I see the potential for this novel to go from “great” to “outstanding” with as little as a single, strong professional critique and a few more passes for editing and proofreading. As it stands, there are perhaps a few small flaws that make this feel thrown together to my overly-persnickety tastes. Really, though, I don’t think most readers would notice, and this didn’t take away from the novels entertainment value.
Story: 




This story has good bones. Amazing bones. Honestly, I’d say this book has the ones of the supermodel. While this particular supermodel may need to work on her posture and perfect her runway walk, there’s no denying the beauty and potential here, which can be seen from a mile away. And it’s unique, a trait that books (and models) need to make it in the industry. Really, I just loved the general plot/idea/premise for this novel. A few developments in the plot felt forced, but they were few and far between and wouldn’t have been a problem if some of the other areas mentioned in this review were addressed.
Pacing: 



Overall, the pacing was pretty good. Hope Collier keeps the story moving forward (most of the time). There were a few spots throughout that I felt could have been tightened up, and the occasional errors perhaps also contributed to distracting me and slowing the pace a tad. And in other places, I felt things could have been fleshed out–but this wasn’t so much a pacing issue, and I will get to those things in the following sections. I wouldn’t say I was hooked, but I will say the pacing was better than you average read.
Voice: 




Hope Collier’s voice really sings in this novel. She has some clever turns of phrase (such as “warmth stole to my cheeks”and “heart sprang into my throat”) and uses some unexpected words in ways that feel completely natural. I admit to the occasional envy over such things.
Characters: 


Some of the characters “bled together” a bit, where they were saying similar things, speaking in similar ways, repeating the same actions/mannerisms, and so on. Also, while I liked the voice of the MC and a lot of aspects of her personality, her character suffered from “everybody wants me” syndrome. I didn’t find it believable that just about everyone in the novel wanted her in some way or another. Didn’t anyone not like her? Even the “antagonists” were really just people who were clearly attracted to her. She’s wanted by her boyfriend, her best friend, and the mystery guy. Even her boyfriend’s “friends” made jokes that indicated they wanted her, and there were tons of female characters throughout who just liked her. There was maybe one character in the whole novel who seemed not to like her (similar to the way Rosalie doesn’t like Bella) but we only see that for one sentence in the whole book and then that disappears and we never even see the motivation behind that. Also, I felt Ashton didn’t really try to improve her situation in many cases, she needed to be “rescued” too often, gave up on things too easily, and was at times, I hate to say it, a bit pathetic and unreasonable. All that said, this seems to happen a lot in Young Adult fantasy, so perhaps this is just a genre quirk that’s not my thing. Some character motivations could have been better developed. There were, however, still a ton of characters with very clear, distinct, believable personalities. Including Ash, even if I didn’t love her. I also never understood why Gabe called her Grace or Gracie (or why he used both.) Also, there were a lot of names starting with the same letter that led me to be confused about who was who in some parts of the story. For example: Kevin and Kyle. This was minor and only caused major confusion once. Gabe was also a bit more two-dimensional than I would have liked, but I saw some strong moments from him and think he had a lot of potential as a character. There were some really great steamy moments in the middle of the novel as well.
Theme: 


I didn’t really feel one way or another about the theme. I do think there was a lot of opportunity still left to build on the themes, however, especially in places where Ash is faced with choices, and in the ending specifically. It’s good, however, that the novel comes full circle in a sense, including in terms of theme, but I won’t get into that because I don’t want to give anything away.
Continuity: 



The story flows forward with very few jolts along the way. I won’t say that it’s forcefully driven, as the plot really revolves more on “things happening” than on the MC taking action and experiencing consequences and being forced into new situations. But most of the pieces come together in the end. The early chapters set the ground work while still moving the story forward and at the same time build interest. That interest, as the story moves on, soon turns to suspense. Sometimes there were some really good hooks to get me to read the next chapter, but some of them were “fake” hooks, that when read straight through didn’t make sense and weren’t supported by character motivations. If a character does/says something that makes no sense, I really need a motivation to make sense of it for me. Instead, those moments just felt like forced hooks instead of natural ones.
Logic: 


There were some plot holes–things that made me go … “Wait! That doesn’t make sense!” or “Hold on a minute! We’re missing something here. Help me connect the dots.” I wouldn’t say it was anything major, but since I took my time reading this, those things really stood out to me. I will say this though–the author did a good job of getting me invested enough in the story to think about it enough to catch what some of us call “fridge logic“. Some of the smaller logic issues included things like LABELED spare keys hidden outside. For those who would hide their keys outside, I don’t think they would label them.
Dialogue: 



Very natural dialogue. I never felt like the characters were saying things that people wouldn’t really say. The only time I was ever slowed down by the dialogue was during those times where characters sounded a bit too much like each other (mostly because of using the same general phrases). This didn’t happen excessively, but it was enough for me to notice.
Setting: 




Hope Collier KNOCKS IT OUT OF THE PARK on setting. While I did start to get a bit annoyed with the constant use of the word “scent” to explain scents, I’d say that is more of a stylistic issue that could be fixed by using a deeper POV. Mostly, though, what I noticed what this rich world full of details that made me feel like I was there. I could visualize it all. And yet, I didnt’ really feel like I was being given the descriptions. They just … happened (with perhaps the exception of one scene that went on a bit long in a rather telling manner, but it was a minor offense.) Really, though, I think this novel has some of the best setting development I’ve read in fiction in a long time.
Point of View: 


I was a bit disappointed with the number of point of view breaks in this novel, especially considering how it’s written in first person. There were times where Ashton seemed to be speaking for other people’s emotions or telling us the motivations behind their actions when she couldn’t have possibly known. And all this said “matter of fact”. I’d have thought Ashton would doubt herself a little bit more than that by the end of the story (after learning that things aren’t always what they seem), but this problem continued throughout the manuscript.
Editing: 


I noticed several recurring problems in the manuscript, which is easiest to just list below:
1) Formatting issues. Toward the end of the novel, new chapters didn’t start on a new page.
2) Repeated words or phrases. Hope Collier seemed to have a new “clutch” word, phrase, or action in each chapter. So in one chapter, she might excessively have eyebrows moving (maybe worded in different ways), or head shaking, or face touching, or fingers brushing on faces. In another chapter, she might use “laughed once” several times. Then the next chapter, it was “murmuring”. Then after that, smiling, then looking, then muttering, then “tight smile”, then face warming, and so on. There was a clutch word in every chapter. One chapter had tingling and trailing and then a tingling trail.
3) Occasionally there was missing punctuation, most commonly when a comma should have been used with a participial phrase (such as “jerked up in bed panting and soaking” and “Gabe shook me trying to get my attention”–as some examples of many). Also there were some missing hyphens.
4) Improper grammar: There were, at times, sentences that weren’t grammatically sound. For example: “Climbing into the shower, I turned the heat up and let the spray beat against my back, massaging away the stress.” Grammatically, that sentence implies she 1) climbed into the shower 2) turned up the hear 3) let it spray her back and 4) it massaged away the stress. ALL AT THE SAME TIME. I don’t think her stress was massaged away simultaneous to her climbing into the shower. Also some pronoun ambiguity caused a few moments of momentary confusion.
5) Typos (such as “held” when the writer meant “hold”) and missing words a little more commonly than I would have expected to see, along with occasional incorrect word usage. Proofreading would have helped with this along with the previously-mentioned formatting issues.
I won’t get into all of it. While there were a lot of comments in this regard and these problems (and several more) presented themselves more frequently than I expected, none of it was major and could all easily be fixed.
The Ending: 



I felt like there were a lot of unanswered questions at the end, but overall, it was such a strong ending that it made up for it. My main concerns were that 1) some of it was too predictable–including things I sensed were supposed to be a surprise–and 2) I wasn’t buying some of the things Gabe said at the end. It didn’t make sense, his motivations weren’t strong enough, he should have had to prove himself and explain himself more. Some resolutions happened to quickly (to the point I didn’t find them believable). But there were some beautiful passages in that segment that really nailed it and aside from the above problem I thought it was one of the stronger endings to a book I’ve read in some time. the only problems really tied back to the character issues.
Closing Thoughts:
While there were some things I have to nit pick regarding this novel, it was overall a good read and I’m glad I made the purchase. I made a ton of comments on my kindle and would have liked to share some examples, but I haven’t mastered the syncing to my computer yet. Also, I think most readers will overlook these things anyway.This novel has the potential to be a bestseller, and if it becomes one, I wouldn’t at all be surprised. It deserves to do well. My average star rating came out to 3.8 stars, but since I don’t have partial stars, I’m going with my gut and saying this is a four star book–one that could easily become five stars (for me) quite easily, and one that could easily already be a five-star novel to many readers. Hope Collier is brilliant and talented and has created a world readers will love.
My overall rating at this time?




I’d recommend this novel to others, and I’d read more from this author.
If you’d like to obtain a copy of this novel, it’s $2.99 on Amazon, and you can purchase it HERE.